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God's Gospel Treason

God’s Gospel Treason

It takes a helluva lot of conviction
to see a god on the other side, even
more I’d say, to promise to be his
bride. If god turns out to be a giant
prick that leaves their womb’s all torn,
do we the unbelievers, treat those who
worship him with scorn.

Or do we take them to our hearts, try to
guide their faith to freedom. Let them
see living creatures as a truth, maybe
find that they don’t need um. As I live
and breath I really want this process
to begin, take away the part with all
the pain so every creature can win.

Well I guess you’ll say I’m a humanist,
but you couldn’t be more wrong, when I
look at the mess we’ve made, our case
doesn’t feel that strong. But i know in my
mind, were the only ones who listen that
matter, and that there was never really a
mouse, who played the part of a mad hatter.
I only believe in that which I can see with
my own eyes, and that one doesn’t go to
a heaven, just because one dies.

Heaven is already here for the living, all
you need to get in there is lots of cash. I
know it’s hard to believe me, because
those with money say I’m white trailer
trash. But I beg you please don’t follow
them, take a walk somewhere very quiet
and listen to your reason. Then I hope
you’ll understand, to love your fellow
humans and all other creatures, isn’t gospel treason.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
What do you believe..
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One of your few writes that needs attention it seemed disjointed, I can see the theme, but it was hard to read.
I have read many of your pieces and they are much smoother than this.
A God to some is a must, though if you look at all things and balance them out, working out that heaven is all around us, and the things you have written.
Then if you behave, and treat all you meet as a part of you then you will become a better Spirit, yet did I detect a bit about Money and trailers, well they ain't going very far are they if they treat people in that way lol.
I would send you all my money but it would cost far too much to post in a letter as the stamp would be all it's worth lol.
Take care young traveller, to search is to be, Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Sorry Ian, forgot about this one, it sort of flew out onto the page. I agree with you and will get to work right away. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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