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Goddam next poem

brutal
words
fall
off
the
edge
of your mouth,
the tip of your tongue
still wagging

that's how i feel about my poems,
someone is always saying do this to that.
i say but it's not in this poem to do that.

no one knows better than i when
to borrow a word
and make it into something it's not.

Last few words: 
what better way to say hey then with this poem. Grin. Hey!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Editing stage: 

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despite warnings I have to say- but you didn't.

cheers,
Jess
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I'd spend more time here but don't think he's fair to post and run, but who knows, things change.

Big grin & hugs.

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in a momentary reprieve recently I wrote three poems but hesitated to post them because I've given no critique lately.
So I made myself give five critiques then posted them with a clear conscience. Is this partly a hangover from my protestant work ethic, do you think?

cheers,
Jess
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If you believe in your work that is all that is required of a great poet.
Why do you question yourself,
Yours as always, Ian

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Unconditional love to you all.
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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

I never question myself. Who would answer? Lol. :-)

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get lots of answers. They are Legion in here. Tee hee. It is good to see you. The poem was a rant I can relate to right now. Too much this, not enough that. How the hell did I used to write anyway?

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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Damn you don't hold a talk with your self, how could I have forgotten lol.
I find that that voice of mine, as I talk to myself doesn't lie.
Well I assume it tells the truth..
Lovely to see you here fighting, I hope the world is treating you well now.
It has been a while and I missed your works, now looking in my crystal ball there is a company of two standing with you, one a lovely lady and another a young man, is it a memory that you hold so close to your thoughts,
You take care and lets see more of your writes, time is passing and we must look to what is or will be,
Yours as always Ian xx

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

good one. shows some confiidence in your work.

Alid

You don't know me very well. tee hee. ha ha.

Nice to meet u!

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Anna.

Alid

grins ...

rising like the phoenix ever and ever again, as all Great poets do :)

love xox

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Hi Lady Jane.

How is the brood? You?

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