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GLIMPSES
Wondering within this dream
randomly with no direction
the larger part of life wasted
with work
worry
waiting
wondering
when does it get better ?
if ever
even the brightest spots
love and family
have their problems
Occasionally late at night
when skies are clear and moon not bright
I wonder
are the stars pinhole peeps
into the real world of grace
while this " life " of hardship
is the nightmare
of sleep
*another free verse excursion
Style / type:
Free verse
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Victorclaude
Thu, 2011-01-06 20:53
A nightmare of sleep.
A nightmare of sleep.
Or this could mean that when we shake off this suit of flesh we wake from this horror called life.
"When a pickpocket meets a holy man all he sees are his pockets."
Unknown (at least to me)
scribbler
Sat, 2011-01-08 10:12
glimpses
It is kind of nice to speculate on such every once in a while. thanks for dropping by.................scribbler
author commentscribbler
Sat, 2011-01-08 20:10
glimpses
don't we all ? Thanks for coming by...............stan
author commentscribbler
Sat, 2011-01-08 20:11
glimpses
I'll get free verse down right some day I hope. I'm glad you liked this................stan
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