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In a Glass of Wine

Staring at the bright night sky
With a glass of wine in my hand
I wish I could Fly
To a Peaceful Land

A land where all is free
All men there are equal
And the next life is just a suqual
of a life without a single worry.

As I raise my glass
I look towards the bright moon.

I remember the days of my youth.
And my dreams of a perfect life.
A house, Kids and wife.
Then I drain my Glass.

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