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The Glass at my Feet

With every sip from the bottle
and each gulp from my cup,

I know a smack of my lips
will say exactly what's up.

Everytime I remember
everything I regret,

it appears to consume me
and put me deeper in debt.

So, I sing songs that I know
with tunes that make me smile,

I sing of every journey
and, the heart of each mile;

if no one else can remember
then, it was mine to forget,

so, I sing louder for volume
and, make it a part of my "set".

Now, I'm sipping from bottles
and cups strewn, all astray,

some from just last night
others from yesterday.

I remember times, dearly
with all moments, so sweet,

and with a last smack of the lips
I'll lay my glass at my feet.

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Structured: Western
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I was told by someone that, this poem was "morose".....(Not, "moronic".) It was then, that I was mortally wounded, and greatly, highly offended. Such is my plight, I now.....digress. docmaverick.
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i am not sure if you have digressed since i have not read the original version of this write...to me this poem is nice soliloquy of a person who frequents his past and gets gripped in it....one of the very few two line verses i have read here which are so expressive...

raj (sublime_ocean)

...am astounded that, someone stepped up to this page.
Go figure,
thanx sincerely,
docmaverick.

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Honest, uncontrived and deeply sad.

Believe me, you write better poetry than lyrics.

cheers,
Jess
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..I actually write "blues lyrics" in my band; so I really have shied away from including them, here. Believe me...they're pretty dismal, even though at times, comical.
Been out of it with a bad run of luck, of late.
thanx,
doc.

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