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That Girl
Look at her so beautiful and tall
long hair the color of fall
she walks long stride after stride
and on her face is a look of pride
I look in the mirror at that ugly girl
the one who's hair doesn't curl
when I walk it's without confidence
I walk in fear and in defense
My shoulders slump, my head falls low
my stride is also kinda slow
where did that pretty girl go?
we look around but she won't show
she sat with friends a smile on her face
while I run home like I’m in a race
that girl who always said hello
was someone that I used to know
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Viviana Smith
Fri, 2020-09-11 10:50
That girl
I wrote this poem about my BFF. She was always a beautiful and confident girl that i looked up to. Ever since she dumped her boyfriend because he was cheating on her she has been different. It was almost like she was a different person.
Kisses,
Vivi