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Gender equality (Africa)

The spirit of blacks keep dancing
at night unknowingly that he is just
a night worker even
A thousand miles has past behind with no light
A million miles are about to come
yet the eyes are still closed
though it seems there is a glittering.

Like the goat claimed to have known
how to climb and his master abandoned
him in the process
The ancestors said and did so
but as a new generations we should
think and do it right.

Her intellectuals are helpful
her efforts are much to count
she is part of us,she is one of us
she, the mother of ours
and of our feature leaders
let the justice speak and the white flag
be waved as love weeps
For all genders are equal.

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The stigmatization about gender in Africa is on a high rate,especially in politics,customs, some offices and in every angels. the humiliation and the intimidation the way people saying after all she is just a woman and i am a man. I stand as an advocate in this case to help enlighten Africans as whole to try and look at women also as the people that has a special role to play in society and they are more valuable in some cases than men.
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its a good one though but i think some of your tenses in this poem needs s better touches

the spirit of the blacks keep dancing
and of our future leaders
let justice speak and the white flag

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

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