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The Gatekeepers

Submitted by billypringle on Fri, 2013-12-13 11:20

Would Athenians,
titans of intellect
know to curse
them?

Would Spartans
raise shields,
to huzzah their
passing?

Would soldiers
like those laconic
spirits stand by
to salute?

and If those gates
were cast open
Would they pass?

No. For Hades
gates are closed
to all and where
the dead reside
the dead defend.

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Dedicated to those that maintain this paltry little site as it is. A sad little haven for the dignified broken, the shit stained souls and smut obsessed and the hopeful with no better place to seek solace.
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Editing - rough draft

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themoonman

Sat, 2013-12-14 05:35

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how do you really feel (lol).

I like the poem, did we inspire your pen?

Ian.T

Sat, 2013-12-14 05:53

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Your Piece is thought provoking and as a reflection on the names you have banded about of late.
This is not a good write and could be far better if you tried harder.
I notice the last few words, well that is a general shout out from your obviously limited feelings as many people gain so much from this site.
I shall arrange a special pass for you so that the gate will be opened for you to a fan fare of laughter and as you pass through it will remind you of all the things you should have done, Yours, Yenti.
PS:- I use my Yenti Name as it means Swamp just for you do come in, lol

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Roscoe Lane

Sun, 2013-12-15 03:14

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Only a plagiarist could ooze so much resentment, i'm sorry we don't inspire. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

billypringle

Sun, 2013-12-15 08:31

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I see you join those ( above) who would rather perpetuate a non existent resentment rather than take the above for what it is. It's not art, not poesy but rather a wry poke at the members of the site such as your self and old Butterfly above who think they are in some way entitled to bully, accuse, degrade and abuse new members and shoo them off the site leaving it for what it is - a place for isolated nonentities and would be suicides to seek solace and emotional support for their incoherent ramblings. Fine with me. Point made.
I don't know you, haven't read you but you point a finger and accuse? Methinks there is less than mediocrity washing round your sad little head. Please answer with a better write, one that praises and elevates the tone of the site rather than demeaning your sad little doggy face further. Fetch little Roscoe...fetch me a poem, fetch me a red one, full of passion, fetch me a blue one full of pathos, fetch me a green ..no let's forget the green one little doggy just let your master bag up your crap and post it instead. All the others do .

How blue the eyes, how wide the smile
its skin so fair of hue but the child is born
of a dead poet's words - few or none are
born of you.

Jimm

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Roscoe Lane

Sun, 2013-12-15 14:19

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Correct me if i'm wrong, but i thought you came to us. Regards Roscoe. One man's poison and all that..?

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

billypringle

Sun, 2013-12-15 14:26

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you came to me - this is my posting and you're on my page. I didn't realize that you had proprietorial rights over this site which after all is actually begging , by virtue of being on the internet, for visitors though it seems when they do various would psychopaths and smut merchants consider it so much "theirs" they chase every one off. Now fetch me that poem doggy.
Jimm

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Roscoe Lane

Sun, 2013-12-15 14:38

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I never said you should leave just try and be yourself, leave your alter ego in the cupboard Some of what you write is good, just don't take the crits to heart. You must try and be stronger. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

billypringle

Sun, 2013-12-15 17:35

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Now either present your evidence or apologize . Then when you've done the decent thing . Please free free to add criticism the poem - which if you have read is neither purporting to be art or poesy of any high caliber but rather a throwaway comment of the sad state of this sorry vanity site. Well? Are you capable of it or are you like many the rest happy to be back slapped and egged on in your indulgences and sad scribbles?
Jimm

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Roscoe Lane

Mon, 2013-12-16 03:48

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Please stop being so bloody angry, read carefully what i've written especially after the word resentment. Then if you feel it still applies to you, then i feel sorry for you and i do apologies. Regards Roscoe.

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Ian.T

Sun, 2013-12-15 19:21

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I am so sorry that you have become so sad, maybe one day when you are walking alone you will be able to forgive yourself.
But at the moment not only is this poem not good the way it is written, but the implications to the Neopoet site is rather childish, also your recent comments to the site have gone against the sites realistic guidelines.
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

billypringle

Mon, 2013-12-16 06:11

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Stop projecting your barely disguised ill will and poverty of spirit on to me. The reason you seem to have all locked in your sad and pathetic personal shortcomings to this site is precisely because none of you will let go of them and therefore wish them on others to justify the incoherent nature of you all being here.
I sir Butterfly am not challenged by any of your imagined and projected so called personal shortcomings, either moral or psychological. Yet I do detect just a tad of that on the site. This seems to be a collective of highly challenged low achievers who want to remain in their pristine wilderness without reference to the outside world of "standards" and "literacy". Why is that do you think? Is it because it's warm , comfortable and a little damp?
So far I have encountered nothing but animosity, anger, accusations and utter rejection as if I was I some way an interloper in a poets paradise, when the truth is I posted one critical comment on a piece that was utterly beyond understanding due to the illiterate nature of the work.
So please take your false pity elsewhere and either post a poem or a post critique that fulfills the nature of what that entails without the personal attacks that you and your homie's seem to revel in.
Jimm

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