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Gasping White Light
the velvet knife
of your tongue
cut my skin
into a thousand
streamers of want
I feathered against
the unknown
a breath in the grasp
of insanity
was as ribbons on
the ground,
I was tossed to roll
aimless to reality
fire licked breasts
as thighs brushed static
into the palms of your
hands …
at first touch
is the flashback,
I am burning white flames
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
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Comments
Ian.T
Sat, 2013-04-20 10:00
Jayne
Now you ask for the Raw truth, when it is laid out there in the lines.
What are you trying to do to this old guy LOL
I shall go to my cave, and keep Sparrow away from this one, as it is Spring you know, and I don't want him being silly,
Yours as always, Ian.T He He
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Ian.T
Sat, 2013-04-20 10:12
Sparrow come here!!!
Sparroooooooooow.......Who put the lights out!!!!!!! Shut up let me cry in peace LOL
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Serendipity
Thu, 2013-04-25 06:56
Ian
I hope you keep a hold of Sparrow, glad that my poem made an impression on you lol
love always JC x
("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)
club special
Sat, 2013-04-20 15:27
At last
Soon as I read this I knew it was your work, a beacon of light among banal mediocrity...
Serendipity
Thu, 2013-04-25 06:57
Thats a lovely thing to say I
Thats a lovely thing to say I am really happy you enjoyed the poem
love JC x
("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)
Frenchf
Sat, 2013-04-20 17:16
Wow
What a fantastic piece. Sensuality to the extreme
Serendipity
Thu, 2013-04-25 06:58
Thanks French
I am very happy you liked it thanks for the read and the comment they are much appreciated
hugs JC x
("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)