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Gasping White Light

the velvet knife
of your tongue
cut my skin

into a thousand
streamers of want
I feathered against
the unknown

a breath in the grasp
of insanity

was as ribbons on
the ground,
I was tossed to roll
aimless to reality

fire licked breasts
as thighs brushed static
into the palms of your
hands …

at first touch
is the flashback,

I am burning white flames   

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 

Comments

Now you ask for the Raw truth, when it is laid out there in the lines.
What are you trying to do to this old guy LOL
I shall go to my cave, and keep Sparrow away from this one, as it is Spring you know, and I don't want him being silly,
Yours as always, Ian.T He He

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Sparroooooooooow.......Who put the lights out!!!!!!! Shut up let me cry in peace LOL

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I hope you keep a hold of Sparrow, glad that my poem made an impression on you lol

love always JC x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

author comment

Soon as I read this I knew it was your work, a beacon of light among banal mediocrity...

Thats a lovely thing to say I am really happy you enjoyed the poem

love JC x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

author comment

What a fantastic piece. Sensuality to the extreme

I am very happy you liked it thanks for the read and the comment they are much appreciated

hugs JC x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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