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Gasping White Light

Submitted by Seren on Sat, 2013-04-20 07:32

the velvet knife
of your tongue
cut my skin

into a thousand
streamers of want
I feathered against
the unknown

a breath in the grasp
of insanity

was as ribbons on
the ground,
I was tossed to roll
aimless to reality

fire licked breasts
as thighs brushed static
into the palms of your
hands …

at first touch
is the flashback,

I am burning white flames

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - draft

Comments

Ian.T

Sat, 2013-04-20 10:00

Jayne

Now you ask for the Raw truth, when it is laid out there in the lines.
What are you trying to do to this old guy LOL
I shall go to my cave, and keep Sparrow away from this one, as it is Spring you know, and I don't want him being silly,
Yours as always, Ian.T He He

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Ian.T

Sat, 2013-04-20 10:12