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Galvanic Idée Fixe

Succumb to these
Visions that you're seeing
Please
For I am those
I'm that ever-present being
What I am, nobody knows
Curiosity only grows and grows
Possibly the missing link?
Do you think?
Maybe,
I suppose
New places never been
I know you'll like it
Just let me in
What?
A perfect fit?
Fuck, not again!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage: 

Comments

The reason why is it has few poetic qualities.
It's just a personal statement.
And doesn't say anything much.
kind of emo

And the title is totally pretentious

cheers,
Jess
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