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Frustration (Just Sharing)

Submitted by lovedly on Sun, 2018-08-26 02:22

They say
Very High BP
and say
no liquour
no sodium
no smoking
just drink plain glasses of water
and
walk
eat plenty of fruits
reduce your weight
the girth for men
must be lesser than x inches
and
for women y inches

else order a wheel chair
reserve a berth in a hospital
better take precautions
than wait for a solution

well end up now
it's no time for frustration

old age alone is welcome
that is all human's resolution
the docs performed his
ordained occupation ...

send notes to friends
kith and kin
to meet finally
and pray for salvation
of all past present
and also future
other's sin
Amen

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Rula

Sun, 2018-08-26 10:45

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Good pieces of advice.
Thank you for sharing and for the reminder!

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lovedly

Sun, 2018-08-26 15:25

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I always share what I know
more shall glance thru
I hope so

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weirdelf

Sun, 2018-08-26 20:56

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there is a grace in your economy of word use. A lovedly gem! I've missed a few in my snippy snarkyness haven't I?

All I can say in response is to quote James Bond-
Life is too short to spend time prolonging it.

and the doctor who, unhappy with a patient's health said-
Stop drinking, stop smoking and do some exercise.
Patient: Will I live forever?
Doctor: No, but it will feel like it.

and myself when I say-
Death is someone else's problem.

cheers,
Jess
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lovedly

Sun, 2018-08-26 22:16

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but for you Lovedly would've been LONELY ... I have stopped giving an incorrect perception come and read me or as you say ''my skirt is up now come in''. Now I am sitting outside a doc's lounge he'd need to comfort me, at 78 where is there time to listen to 'James Bond'. When I was born the saints all said, I'd die one day, any day from today but my pop was a doc he said 'we all will but when that no one can say'.
I walked lonely miles had countless accidents , worst diseases and came to Neopoets to share what seven decades in my mind had sown. Now I think I am in the bloom of time let me die,satisfied. Don't sigh I wonder if you will ever read this piece, it's straight English No poetry. But I will convert it if you feel like it.

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weirdelf

Sun, 2018-08-26 22:46

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I have waited so long to hear you speak plain English and it is delightful. I really think it feels more honest, more personal and makes me feel closer to you than any comment I've ever read of yours.
Thank you, friend.

cheers,
Jess
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'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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lovedly

Sun, 2018-08-26 23:34

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that you have been so patient with a stubborn guy like me all these, say ten years or so, both as Loved and Lovedly My regards and cheers. I won't die as yet will play the last POST Trumpet if need be. Good night Jess.I see you have finally called me a friend, a tear trickles....

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IRiz

Mon, 2018-08-27 13:55

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Hello Lovedly.
I like the way you have expreassed the oldest feeling on Earth. The poem sounds as if you and I talk sitting in my kitchen sharing one of the unadvised drinks and I want to raise my hand and pat your shoulder.
Hey, you are only one ocean away.
By the way, I always knew you are a real poet.

IRiz

lovedly

Mon, 2018-08-27 16:08

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Hey, you are only one ocean away

u make me smiley we r not half an ocean away
Born poets you RUSSIAN I leaned some decades since
khorshaw deyuska ochen khoroshaw
yah umanya radh swamy paszhnakomitsa etc
thee
cpaciba

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IRiz

Mon, 2018-08-27 16:46

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Ha ha ha

IRiz

lovedly

Mon, 2018-08-27 21:00

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lol or
rflol
thanks dobri nech

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lovedly

Fri, 2019-05-31 20:59

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IF JESS and Iriz liked it

I think the newer poets
who missed it may also like it
Hence uplifting it

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