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Frosted Glass
While liquid emotions thicken into chilly icicles
imprisoned within a brittle psyche
the longing draws your warmth
caressing a promise
of thy lips sipping my nectar
in that overwhelming moment
enveloped by your cozy warmth
tears roll down to greet you
drenching my cheeks
your touch turns them
into dew
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Free verse
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Comments
Geremia
Wed, 2015-10-07 16:02
Bravo !!!!
Bravo !!!!
joe
sei poeta davvero !
raj
Wed, 2015-10-07 16:08
Thanks Joe for your time read
Thanks Joe for your time read and encouraging words.
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raj (sublime_ocean)
wesley snow
Wed, 2015-10-07 16:09
What Geremia said.
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raj
Wed, 2015-10-07 16:13
Thanks Wesley for your time,
Thanks Wesley for your time, read and comment.
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raj (sublime_ocean)
alidzain
Wed, 2015-10-07 19:07
Sublime, raj
thanks for sharing.
Alid
raj
Thu, 2015-10-08 14:32
Thanks Alid for your time,
Thanks Alid for your time, read and comment.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Sparrow
Wed, 2015-10-07 19:15
raj
A vision of beauty and so well written, no need to say more,
Yours as always, Ian..
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raj
Thu, 2015-10-08 14:32
Thanks Ian for your time,
Thanks Ian for your time, read and appreciative comment.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
lovedly
Wed, 2015-10-07 20:24
hip hip hurray
what else can loved say ?
just the nectar of dew
due from you
raj
Thu, 2015-10-08 14:31
Thanks Lovedly for your time
Thanks Lovedly for your time and appreciative cheers.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
lovedly
Thu, 2015-10-08 15:17
hahahhaa
back and glad to c u sublime
coming out of oceans lime
ok
underscore
ocean _lime
Rula
Fri, 2015-10-09 11:53
Wow!
What a lively capture raj!
Just wondering why have you used "turning" instead "turns" or "turned"
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raj
Fri, 2015-10-09 14:05
Thanks Rula for your
Thanks Rula for your appreciative exclamation. As for the use of the word "turning" it was because the poem runs in present tense. I agree turns could still be used. Why do you think "turning" is not an appropriate usage?
Between this poem and Lovestruck could be a result of an infection of :"hiding emotions in metaphors" work shops which I used to peekaboo into from time to time as a learning experience...lol..
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raj (sublime_ocean)
Rula
Sat, 2015-10-10 09:28
Hello raj
by sense I thought you need a verb here while "turning" as used here a gerund and is a noun.
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raj
Sat, 2015-10-10 14:24
Ok. Will change to "turns"
Ok. Will change to "turns"
Thanks Rula for taking time to suggest changes. Much appreciated
raj (sublime_ocean)