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A Friend of Mine
A Friend of Mine......
“Once upon a time”
The beginning of a tale
“It all began”, or “it started when”; are beginnings to use as well
“Happily ever after”; words meant to last
But the ending told my story- as I relive the past
“To love, honor, and cherish”- “have and hold, friends forever”
A vow between people, or an oath before God-commitment made together
“To whom it may concern”–all of those involved
“Please accept my apologies”; until matter is resolved
“Handle with care”, “do not tear, bend or fold”-
A heart is just as fragile and worth it’s weight in gold
“Do not remove” what’s personal from you to anyone
For they may “use it against you” – “after all is said and done”
“Listen very carefully” to what others have to say
“Pay close attention,” to who’s around and what could get in your way
“Sorry to bother you”…. is what you did to me-
“Please to meet you” is how it use to be
“What seems to be the problem”–you ask? Is it me or is it you?
I “followed all the instructions” and tips and hints too….
But “one thing leads to another” but another is what you found
By asking “How can I help you?” or “be of service”… when I was not around
“In sickness and in health”- you treated me just the same
You “do not open” yourself up to me but want me to play your game.
“Do unto others as they do unto you”- “Forever, till the end of time”-
“That’s all Folks” — seems to do.
From cheating, and telling lies, to mental abuse
“Please forgive me,” – “Baby I love ya”…
“Please excuse me” but there is no use–
Love is a “Special offer” so sometimes, you must “open other end”
Keep “this side up” and “do not break” that bond of being a friend
If you break the “valueable gift inside” of love, friendship, or lessons learned-
The memories posted of what was once free,
Will be paid by you, if returned
“All’s well, end’s well”…if not, Oh well–
But let me “thank you for your time”
Sincerly,– I was to you….when you were a friend of mine……
Comments
Geezer
Sun, 2016-01-10 14:14
I really...
like this and can't wait to see if you polish it up so that the rhythm is a bit better. Remember, leaving out a word or line can always add to, not take away, but by the same token, words might be needed to add. Anyways, Welcome to Neo. and I hope that we will see more from you. Please feel free to ask question\s of anyone here and join some workshops! They can add to your expertise and gain you friendships that will last for many years. I hope that I become one of them. ~ Geezer
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Sweet cheeks sheila
Tue, 2016-01-19 03:49
A Friend of Mine review
Thanks for your input. I appreciate your honesty and hope you enjoy my other works
wesley snow
Sun, 2016-01-10 16:29
Platitude.
A poem written with platitudes. Magnificent. The slow change in the storyline was subtle. The whole thing just pleased me immensely.
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Esker
Wed, 2016-01-13 16:03
seasoned with spice
a meal
of words
like the wit and ponder throughout
so very human
the elaborate
movements of this
drew me in
the words
found places
in the heart
the storms
shadows and
lightning
thank u!
lovedly
Tue, 2016-01-19 04:03
mostly here
read shorter poems
15 to 20 i can't read beyond
ur good
all above have said so
welcome from me
too
you could scan me through and through
my first poet here was sheila also
now gone with the wind
with her new found darling kid
meaning bf
hubby finally
raj
Wed, 2016-01-20 13:21
Hello
Good expressive poem, I guess written in solitude about life in hind sight...that's what I could perceive of it..may be I am right or way off target...
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)