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Friend I Say
Friend I Say
Seeing a space inside my head,
from corners four to centre stage.
Inside that man I see is honest bred,
perhaps he knows the weight of age.
To stand outside this room his house,
then comment upon his stance or gait.
Gives same the right of Rat to grouse,
lest we send this man to glibly state.
He mustn’t dance on cathedral floor,
natural the steps that make his choice.
To make good his sense he will ignore,
those who speak of kings in godly voice.
He shall have no kings among men,
nor instruction of or against his will.
Honour his own life, that of his kin,
then friend you’ll be now, until.
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Comments
Seren
Sat, 2014-02-15 08:00
Roscoe
What wonderful poem, I cant see anything to suggest at this moment I am still moved by the words,
Kudos
love JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Roscoe Lane
Sun, 2014-02-16 04:40
Thank you,
Thank you Jane, i'm glad you liked this, Love Roscoe..
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
alidzain
Sat, 2014-02-15 08:16
like it
i like it..by the way, you misspelled the friend in the title but other than that, its all good
Alid
Seren
Sat, 2014-02-15 08:20
HA ! I totally missed the
HA ! I totally missed the misspelt title I am useless tonight...good catch Alid.
JC x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Roscoe Lane
Sun, 2014-02-16 04:41
Thank you,
Thank you, i will correct my mistake if i can. Regards Roscoe..
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
raj
Sun, 2014-02-16 05:33
Roscoe
I liked it most of all for the style of presentation..
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Roscoe Lane
Mon, 2014-02-17 02:47
Thank you,
Thank you raj, your comments are very appreciated. Regards Roscoe..
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.