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Friend I Say

Friend I Say

Seeing a space inside my head,
from corners four to centre stage.
Inside that man I see is honest bred,
perhaps he knows the weight of age.

To stand outside this room his house,
then comment upon his stance or gait.
Gives same the right of Rat to grouse,
lest we send this man to glibly state.

He mustn’t dance on cathedral floor,
natural the steps that make his choice.
To make good his sense he will ignore,
those who speak of kings in godly voice.

He shall have no kings among men,
nor instruction of or against his will.
Honour his own life, that of his kin,
then friend you’ll be now, until.

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What wonderful poem, I cant see anything to suggest at this moment I am still moved by the words,

Kudos

love JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Thank you Jane, i'm glad you liked this, Love Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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i like it..by the way, you misspelled the friend in the title but other than that, its all good

Alid

HA ! I totally missed the misspelt title I am useless tonight...good catch Alid.

JC x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Thank you, i will correct my mistake if i can. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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I liked it most of all for the style of presentation..

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thank you raj, your comments are very appreciated. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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