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French leave

Submitted by judyanne on Thu, 2012-05-31 03:22

unable
to perceive my own light
whilst in the glow of infinity
I separate my essence into the darkness -
call upon that which I am not -

exist within
illusion-and-a-score of appearance

so I can experience self

and I purposely forget who I am
as it profits me not to know

but, in the stillness of reserve
deathly calm and mute
where quiescence holds solitude
and soundless hush
would resound
with cacophonic clarity

I hear my absence
.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2012-05-31 12:13

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Whole worlds can be heard within the silence! I'm in love with the Zen(ness) of this write! You are such a very wise woman! If I were to quote you back favorite lines, I would have to quote the whole piece! Absolutely lovely! I have no suggestions, only appreciation for the work.

love, Cat

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judyanne

Thu, 2012-05-31 22:38

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thank you so very much for the supportive comments
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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weirdelf

Fri, 2012-06-01 22:00

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The writing is, of course excellent, but my hippie Buddhist head is raving and my scientist pragmatic head is raving in a different way.

I'm no dualist, though quite a proficient duellist, so I'll take it both ways.

Perhaps you are directly experiencing the 'dark matter' that is causing many cosmologists to turn to Buddhism.

cheers,
Jess
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judyanne

Fri, 2012-06-01 23:53

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I didn't think you would like this one jess :)
dark matter eh -holds it all together - the architect of poetry that writes/ shapes the universe?
interesting subject that one

love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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loved

Sat, 2012-06-02 03:26

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but four categories only are dual

Gemini
Saggy
Virgo
and
Pisces
r u one of these?
Pisces maybe!

loved

loved

Sat, 2012-06-02 03:45

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French leave

My concept of things French
is limited to two aspects only
about Frenchies…
One is the kiss,
none can afford to miss
in the event of one’s sexy sojourn
through the passage called love
when two lovers just glue!

The second kind is
the one of absence…
when to accomplish the first,
one as to from school
place of duty or appointment
has to remain obscure
and
so in a Frenchy encounter
entwined to assure
be frenchily absent for sure
to be to the world obscure

well I have waffled again
as Frenchiness is my earthly domain.
I loved Nero and Rome
none are now the same..
at least not Frenchy
Paris is…

loved

judyanne

Sun, 2012-06-03 06:52

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thanks for the comments
pisces :)
how did you know?
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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loved

Sun, 2012-06-03 11:46

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I have to request you to apply your mind to my time theory......NOTE /POEM ...

Human beings fail to realize
that each one
repeat
each one...
is an individual entity.
I am no poet at all ,
(simply a wafller so rightly judged)
of what my mind exudes ,
i compose in a trance..

but I am a scientist studying the Human Mind
and human interaction
for decades now.
If you read my note to you ,
you will know that ... ....i do waffle ......as far as poetry may be concerned
but not otherwise.
Regards

loved

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