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Submitted by lou on Sun, 2010-11-21 02:16

Uncoil, with gradual breaths
Open your eyes ,refocus,
 twenty twenty vision..

Free
span the breadth
and width , expand.

Laugh, cry, scream 
Let it all out.
Expose yourself to reality.

Free.
span the breadth
and  width,
expand.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Bonitaj

Sun, 2010-11-21 11:08

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this exhortation to BE YOURSELF! Freed up to enjoy it!!
Nice one Lou!
Boni

Bonitaj

lou

Mon, 2010-11-22 00:49

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Thanks

Lou

Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!

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judyanne

Mon, 2010-11-22 03:54

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good write lou

did you notice your line breaks with the repeated stanza?
'span the breadth
and width , expand. '

'span the breadth
and width,
expand.'
did you mean to make them different? just me - i think it looks tidier if they're the same

love and hugs
judy
xxxx

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