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A Formula

Submitted by brittle light on Thu, 2010-12-30 02:37

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floating words
of implicity (and sense)
breathed at the pace
of engaged soliloquy
speaking of meaningful excellences
or bewildering travails

then,
refolding that which has been discerned,
back into life's inevitable, inexorable
fluctuations

finality is not the point
never was
never will be

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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brittle light

Thu, 2011-05-12 17:55

brittle light's picture

I like your no nonsense approach to critiquing my works... telling it like it is...calling 'em as you sees 'em. So far, I have agreed with all your suggestions, observations and assesments. You will keep me on my toes, knock me out of laziness and complacency about poetry, and writing it. I admire intellectual honesty and intelligence....but when I disagree with you, you will here my honest response....hopefully, neither of us has a glass jaw.

respectfully

Al

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