That's how it is for us right now in the middle of our busy season, racing and busy and hectic.
Glad you enjoyed this one.

I did try something similar to your suggestion, at first, but I edited it into its current version when I realized that the ending didn't specify who actually removed the t-shirt, heehee.
And impatience...is what I often feel, before...

:)

Glad you liked it.

I think that scent is the strongest sense in terms of memory. I cannot speak for others, but an aroma or scent can plunge me back into memories decades old, as if I were still there.
Tense: a good idea, thank you.

It's actually a real event, happened two weeks ago.
Glad you liked it so much!

I am happy that you enjoyed it so.
I have others like this, but they are, shall we say, a bit more inimate, heehee. Not for public consumption, if you follow me.

;)

LOL
It's our busy season at work right now: I would forget my brain sometimes, if it wasn't firmly enscounced in my thick skull.
But even if I had not remembered, heehee, she would have reminded me.
In the best possible way.

Thanks for your critique.
The struggle with time and place: all of the "work" references are deliberate. The repetition serves to reinforce the sense of hectic activity and busy life that made me forget in the first place.

Details: I paint distinct pictures in readers' minds. I dislike vauge or implied discriptions in these kinds of pieces, and so I detail.Also, cadence and rythym are important in freeform poetry, and extra words and lines - although they may be superfluous - do serve to focus cadence, and therefore impact. And descriptiveness is part and parcel to the way I write freeform poetry.

The plush vanity chair, and its location, says things about my wife, as well.

In heavy traffic: I am illustrating the circumstance in which I go to work, not merely the fact that I am going. The work reference again forces the reader to keep that idea firmly in the forefront of thoughts, and the description is important, because it shows the reader what I go through to get to work, and this is one of the reasons I forgot.

At my desk: same rule applies, differentiating between two different parts of my job, i.e. at my desk and in the warehouse, and the implication that because I have two completely different areas in which I work, things are always busy.

She was wearing it, evidenced by the previous verse, and the fact that I took it off.

Thanks again Amal, I will leave this a day or two, thinking about what you said, and then read again with your critique in mind, to see if I want to change it.
And I am glad that you enjoyed this so much.

I am glad that you enjoyed it.

I am glad that you enjoyed it so much.

:)

Edevold, I confess that I did start out with some, let us say, far more explicit references than I ended up with. Most of my "romantic" poetry starts as little more than pornography, which I then re-write in more romantic terms. We males tend to see love in far more physical terms than our women do, I think, hence the way I start these kinds of poems.
I think if I was writing exclusively for a male audience that explicitness would work, but since half my readers are ladies, I cannot get too explicit without negative reaction from some quarters. Not that I care about negative reactions personally, but I am writing for as wide an audience as I can get.
Besides, I think the implication of arousal and excitement is there at the end, given your suggestion!

I am glad that you liked this,

Yeah, readers will do that...i just like the little details, I think it helps with the cadence, and focuses the mind more on the subject.

Glad you enjoyed this.

OK, I won't.
Glad u liked it, Shirl.

Thanks for reading and enjoying. Sorry it took so long to reply, but we're in the middle of our busy season at work, and things are impossibly right now!
Glad that you liked this.