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forgive me

Submitted by judyanne on Mon, 2012-07-16 11:34

when he was called back Home I hated You
for stealing such a treasure from my world
I screamed at You and begged it be untrue
anathema I, to the heavens, hurled

ashamed, I ask now that You will forgive
my petty, childish, human ignorance
in questioning the reason, Your own motive
in making me abide within his absence

for since assured acceptance has begun
I fully understand I should not whine
because deep down I know he was Your son
long before he ever came as mine
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raj

Mon, 2012-07-16 14:54

What a wonderful way Judyanne to reconcile with an immense loss of flesh n blood...

for since assured acceptance has begun
I fully understand I should not whine
because deep down I know he was Your son
long before he ever came as mine

raj (sublime_ocean)

judyanne

Tue, 2012-07-17 08:20

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lovely to see you... thank you so much for the great comment
love judy
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
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Roscoe Lane

Mon, 2012-07-16 15:15

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Stunning piece of poetry, i love the simplicity in which you've said so much. Love Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

judyanne

Tue, 2012-07-17 08:21

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for the very supportive comment
love judy
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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scribbler

Mon, 2012-07-16 16:27

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Time Does heal doesn't it?..............stan

judyanne

Tue, 2012-07-17 08:25

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once one realises that there are two other certainties along with death and taxes
- now and change....
love judy
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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loved

Tue, 2012-07-17 09:43

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after they all told me
not to whine
this whining is catching on like
pneu -what -monia

glad raj also joins in

loved

judyanne

Thu, 2012-07-19 10:18

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thanks loved
hugs
judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Rula

Tue, 2012-07-17 13:27

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Almost brought tears into my eyes .Can't say more!!

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judyanne

Thu, 2012-07-19 10:18

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thank you very much
love judy xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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arja

Wed, 2012-07-18 10:07

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...there's nothing to crit..its something close at heart..and i like it.. ;)

judyanne

Thu, 2012-07-19 10:19

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for the visit and the very supportive comment
love judy
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Ian.T

Thu, 2012-07-19 10:40

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That you can scream at the returning home of one so dear and write about it is a beautiful thing.
That tears form is a show indeed of the things you have had to accept of this life, Beautifully written by a beautiful Spirit, for a beautiful Spirit,
Yours Ian

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

judyanne

Fri, 2012-07-20 12:27

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for the very lovely words
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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