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a foolishness

blithely adding to
and making reduction of
the population
which invented Zeus
those high living gods
of old Olympus
asked for sacrifice, destruction

uncaring

until their creators
voted
against them

we read of
their downfall
their flaws

for mankind finally wrote into
the history of myth
mishaps of
no-longer-wanted-deities
(deciding, perhaps
one god would do)
and had them annihilated
in a heavenly war

little has changed I am sad to report
to have our say today
we still mould or break him
and invent his voice
.

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I've started to think you know about the Greek Mythology just as much as you know about your own life. :) though it is not always easy-for me as a reader to relate and therefore to enjoy the read.

If I am to pick I'd admit I found the first stanza the most memorable where it referes to the carlessness of today's human beings and the destruction they cause all around

but as I am not fully aware of the other deities and gods , I can't say how this is memorable for me in one way or another .

May be adding a reference stanza by the middle would make it easier to be read..Only a suggestion but you need to hear from the experts I believe..

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thank you for the read and comments
but, again i think you may have mis-read me
all my fault i imagine - not making myself clear :)

i'm not really naming any of the gods - just referring to them in general, and how we write them in and out of our history to suit ourselves...

love judy
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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I've always preferred the pyre of the last hero setting the heavens on fire (Die Gotterdammerung)but I certainly see where you're coming from with your poem as well.

Ron

Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

thanks ron
lol - i wouldn't attempt to compete with wagner... or the norse myths - 'though i always liked the name Brynhildr lol

love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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to me it doesn't break new ground or challenge much established thought. Especially the idea that one god over many might be an advancement. Remember in this workshop the ideas themselves are open to critique.
Beautifully written, of course.

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yes - i know i have done better

but as far as saying that one god is an advancement - i didn't

i was more doing a tongue in cheek - the ancients decided perhaps that one god would be easier to control .... (‘deciding one god would do’) i thought the cynicism was there - but it obviously wasn't - will have to work on it

thanks again
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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I always loved how their gods represented the foibles and failings of human beings. I think most in the modern age have forgotten the ability to believe in a playful god rather than a jealous, vengeful one. The latter reeks of social control.

Ron

Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

i think that's why i have always loved the tales too

and an astute observation there about social control...

xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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my fallibility knows no bounds.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

i think i need to make it clearer
thanks jess
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Makes me think of how sad my mother was
when St Christopher no longer carried the status of Saint.
Having all her life enjoyed his "company,"
his legend appealed to her so much. :)

L Ann.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

thank you - and i sympathise with your mother - i thought it quite disgusting that they took away christopher's sainthood....

he's still a saint to me :)
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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What I like about all your poems is, the great energy and thought that you put into them.

always, Cat

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thank you so much for the lovely comment
hugs
judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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