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Fire poem (in the style of emily dickinson)

Im worried for a fire waiting, solemn
On the horizon, calmly spouting smoke
The back and forth of Natures jaunty slolem
Dosnt seem, to me, to be a joke!

But fire comes and goes and so does growth
Of future tinder freshly to be burned.
Did you know, mostly water is in smoke?
As is in plants before, to smoke, they're turned

And smoke clouds often gather into rainclouds
So pyrocumulonimbus rain down lightning
And more fires begin, the sky to shroud
Drawing those who do the dangerous fighting

Inactive in my house I sit and worry
While miles away Miss Nature does her work
In cycles we must always go, so hurry!
Make peace with it Before you're in the dirt!

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these are my favorite lines:

Inactive in my house I sit and worry
While miles away Miss Nature does her work
In cycles we must always go, so hurry!
Make peace with it Before you're in the dirt!

Good Luck on the contest!

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thought is that you may need a comma in the first line, between fire and solemn, the rest is great! Oops! you need an apostrophe in [they're turned]. I like the sort of disjointed thoughts about the firefighters being in danger and the different aspects of smoke and the clouds causing lightning and more fires. Hope this season of fires is kinder than the last few. ~ Geez.
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i hope so too! prayers the one near me stops soon

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you have my prayers, and I will light a candle for you.

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