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Final Confirmation

I hope as soon as I'm finished you will see what I'm telling you. I say it with conviction because I know it most certainly to be true. My angel my bookie my princess it is you that they crave. So please allow me to take the wheel freeing you they made a slave. She does not deserve that pain that they have given her. It's my cross I bare and it's my pain to endure. She is to young to know that pain so please give it to me. Just let me know the truth it will set me free. So I look to the the heavens and reflect the path I chose. For the sake of arguing to my loved ones this is what I propose. Let's forgive our brother neighbor and out enemy too. Let's not lie to each other and instead be tried and true. I don't lie cheat or steal nor should they. Just follow me cause I'm the way. Though you may think I act outta haste. You need to know that not a second nor minute will I waste. You may not always win but u never will loose. Being so after all it's your life you choose. Maybe a little bit you have a clue. Than you should know we are stronger in numbers greater than two. So I stand corrected and before you all. You should fear me not even little nor atall. So that when later comes a time that you see two sets of foot prints in the sand it was when together we walk. When there was only one it was when you in silent spirit did we alone talk. Don't be another man hidden with his foolish pride. Don't even admit defeat before you have even tried. So here I stand before you so one and come all. Together we can make it and break down the walls of adversity and our in self built secluded wall. Know I can be found when you just call my name. Just promise if something Sparks your interest such you hav mine be it's eternal flame. Just know and with understanding your life is never again be the same. But not for bad but in fact for good. Do anything possible more than you ever day dreamed you could. My life is definitely an ace of Spade. But know that mine comes before always because first is always Jayde. If you aren't first our last and that's why in my book you are mine always first.

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Stephanie Destiny-Anne Ashton

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I honestly can't see this as being poetry in any way shape or form. Sorry to be a bit negative, but.......................

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