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"A Field of Sunflowers"

A Seed Head

Once more I stand in awe
curving away seeming to fall,
row on row of polished stones,
a beauty reflected, wind honed

There in the distance I must go
a spiral path of seeded cobbles so.
The stones seem to grow larger,
as I walk with the greatest care

What’s this I see at the end,
there green triangles wait for me
Then waving bright as the sun,
large yellow banners one by one

In the distance I hear a gun,
a beautiful man, dying in the sun
Scattering paints of lovers dreams,
canvas split in fields of green

I must fly now to another flower
this is the world’s terrible hour
No more will he paint in vain,
a one eared mans love has taken him….
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The Bee all and end all, of all legends
Handed down by many Bees
Is this story true, as their legends say?.
Did we lose a lovely artist this way.

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I should cut My ear off and thus gain fame lol. I am given to understand he did some of his best painting while institutionalized

Not sure if many saw the point of the write or who it was about, I have written about quite a few historical people and places and often wonder if they are remembered, the bees don' forget, lol.
Thanks for your visit, it was great to see you there,
Yours, Ian..

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Unconditional love to you all.
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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

author comment

addressing a crowd like
my kind
of duffers..............>>>>>><<<<<<<
Can't make a difference

who know not
they don't Know
so add a note
either before or towards the end
enlighten em all
my kind
LOL
or
RFLOL
ask Stan what all

did you IAN
Read my
NAKED TREES REVISED CONTEST KIND
if not
kindly!

Thank you for you visit, I wonder what you thought of this piece ????????.
I have read your edition to the November Contest and have left a good comment, glad to see of late you are beginning to write how a Bard should write,
Take care, Yours, Ian..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

author comment

else some one will or may say
late lovedly
hahaahaaaaa
lol
stan style

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