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Feathering Steel,

Feathering Steel…

Feathers no match against our steel,
tiny bones get crushed or broken.
Your chirps drowned out by tyre squeal,
barely a care shown, or word gets spoken.

We invade your space on iron wing,
chase you off our runway or routes,
We pay little notice while you sing,
referring to it sweetly when it suites.

Your grace is noted even admired,
Jealous eyes watch from below.
Ungrateful fools that you inspired,
Man’s grand ego continued to grow.

Barely a mention that you were first,
or that we only fly to turn a buck.
Sorry, I forgot another human thirst,
using flight to blow one another to fuck.

Will man’s horrific abuse never end,
or his incessant greed diminish.
We never know what’s around a bend,
I only hope you're there to see our finish.

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Something else man will ruin, some track record we have...
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First a typo..last line should be You're not your. Now on to the poem. Everything we do affects the environment including things we do with the intent of helping. Did you know that the wind turbines we put up to decrease fossil fuel usage kills large quantities of flying birds. And more deer are killed by cars than hunters in most states. I'm not sure what the answer is. We Can't go back to living in caves but it seems some of the "progress" we make is not worth the price....stan

Thank you Stan, I'll correct my typos etc, but as far as fossil fuels go we got to think smarter. Nasa spends billions on space ships, I hear there is a rover on Mars that will be using equipment that is powered from the sun, Surely if we applied the same brains to vehicles we could stop using gas guzzlers, and if every car had to be fitted with anti collision sensors. Look at the work we could create. As far as the turbine theory goes I believe the fossil fuel industry are being less than truthful. But you and I could debate and come up with ideas all day, but it will take politicians to stop pandering big business and start telling people how it is. Thank you again. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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I think about the ecological wreckage we create. We can do better and there are sometimes easy ways to help without hurting either us or the environment. I know that many airports use hawks and eagles to chase birds from the area and it seems to work pretty well. Anyhow, Your poem has a good theme and your rhyme is great. Your rhythm is just slightly off in a couple of places and would make a couple of changes in the first few verses:
Leave off the [ly] on the end of jealous and switch the [d] for an [s] on continue. A couple of other places, but it's your poem. Good to see people rhyming for a change. ~ Gee.
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Thank you Gee, I don't know the answers but there are people in big business who don't want change. And until the people of the world demand true democracy, governments will always cater to big business. And we all know that capitalism is driven by greed not need. Anyway I've read what you said about the structure and rhythm and have a few ideas. Thank you again, hope your good. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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I wont comment on the content as such, but on the poem... except to say that it's good to know more people are feeling for the environment, flora & fauna.
I like the contrasts you put up here... As poetry should, it certainly provokes thought on critical elements of life, so bravo.

Cheers
Anni

My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"

Thank you Anni, we have got to keep chipping away at the politicians and hope we can convince industry. Thank you, Love Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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