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The father's Work
Are we sneakily promoting senseless free flowing mischaracterizations by implying blindness concerning the beautifully vibrant tones... and uniqueness of
our black, white, and brown skins?
Even more, quiet demand kow tows to [A] political correctness that only
unmasks the unreachable achiness of what's not possible.
( at any rate ), does our arrogant subconscious context suggest flaws in the father's work, or are we really at times, so easily...………………………
" saw through?"
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage:
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Comments
Eumolpus
Tue, 2019-08-20 12:33
your poem
is not a poem to me. it is prose. I have nothing against prose.
I have too often spent time in this subject with new posters here with no response. So to go further, why do you think this is poem?
Just by calling something a written a poem doesn't make it a poem. We need rules to make it a game. otherwise we are playing baseball on a tennis court. It's all fake news.
you will find this debate most useful if you want to be a serious writer.
Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings
skon bon
Tue, 2019-08-20 12:47
It's not a poem?
Your opinion is entitled, respect is given.
Is it not poetic in rhythm when read correctly?
is it's essence not of poetry?
and finally. traditional can also be another word for narrow minded. that's no insult lobbed at you, but such is.
author commentEumolpus
Tue, 2019-08-20 16:19
Then define it
Why is it a poem? Do the lines have any reason to be? Are the words alive with images, sound? Is it just based on the performance by the writer to read it aloud so it sounds like a poem? Is it a prose poem? What is that? A poet today must ask that of themselves. Poetry to me is craft as well as content
I think it was Pinsky who said “If you have to ask whether it’s a poem or not, then it’s not’
Tell me why yours is
Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings
Eumolpus
Tue, 2019-08-20 16:19
Then define it
Why is it a poem? Do the lines have any reason to be? Are the words alive with images, sound? Is it just based on the performance by the writer to read it aloud so it sounds like a poem? Is it a prose poem? What is that? A poet today must ask that of themselves. Poetry to me is craft as well as content
I think it was Pinsky who said “If you have to ask whether it’s a poem or not, then it’s not’
Tell me why yours is
Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings