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When the calabash is broken,
who will mend it?
When the light is covered with a bucket,
How will it eliminate the darkness?
The nail had fallen in the sea,
who will find it?

For this life we all live,
We must surely fall asleep.
Eternal, eternal asleep,
For we all wish to dream blossomy.
For this is the beginning of our journey,
Fare well you have a nice sleep

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Structured: Western
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This is my condolence to late MR Esker's family,and all Neopoet members.
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His type poetry is rare and we shall miss him more as time passes........stan

A good write for our friend that journeyed on.
Take care and know that he has probably read your piece.
Yours as always Ian..

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Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

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