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Far visions

In the far distance of my minds vision
I see flowers from the Garden of Eden
more humans flower each day

many wither away

but for times immemorial the gardens stay
all newer generation comers have a good day

tis a lovely morn
and an enchanting sunrise
just for you today
as my voice in harmony
words and thoughts
for you all display

friends come along
have a very propitious
lucky ...happy and merry today
as we all compose
on such a lovely day
friends
of ours today......

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Free verse
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your poetic friend i truly am

some one read it somewhere
and selected this one for a competition
great feelings no !!!!!
but my poetry is not to be subjected
to humiliation
so i said
NO!!!SIMPLY NO !!!

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poet or poetic in a poem you are being self-reflexise and a non-poetic. Mostly when you whine about not getting read enough.

cheers,
Jess
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advice well taken reviewed any better ? now

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