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Fantasy Man

Submitted by franny50 on Sat, 2011-03-12 00:21

Fantasy Man

Simple gestures that make me smile
His caring touch to last awhile
A man of honor to admire
Not a cad or a common liar
A humble soul who is kind
Of kindred thoughts: we're of one mind
Whose laughter makes me want to dance
In him, I 'll always take a chance
Whose very presence make others stare
His movements like a gentle bear
At home,he loves to cook and sing
In him I’ve found my everything

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Structured: Western
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Editing stage: 
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franny50

Sat, 2011-03-12 19:51

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Thank You everyone and thanks for the line change suggestion.And Xena,I am happy to be back.Hope you are well!

"Life is Not only Merriment,It Is Desire And Determination"-Kahlil Gibran

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Sparrow

Sat, 2015-06-20 10:17

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Your style is fine and I see that it is your normal way of writing.
Now we can get down to finding our feet not metric lol.
There are many that can help you on the poetry trail, though I am just here, ask if needed for one of the mentor types if you should need more, Yours as always Ian..

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