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The family man

He came from a hardworking clan
Sometimes he travelled to distant lands
The hardworking man Morning after morning he toiled
To provide for his family
Now and then he checked on them
To find out who needed what and when
He protected them and loved them all
He was the family man

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There is not a lot of imagery but it is relative. I believe you need to keep writing and reading and come here more.
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Later now,

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That's how I see it,

Mark L.

Thank you Mark
I will be sending more of my poems. I hope you like them too. You can send further replies to
my email address [email protected]

Eulekia

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This is not a community where templates are welcomed and I cannot comment by way of your email.
Thank you,

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That's how I see it,

Mark L.

Thanks Mark.

Eulekia

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Dear April thank you
I will be sending more of my poems. I hope you like them too. You can contact me at my email address
[email protected]

Eulekia

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