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Falling and Falling

I’m standing on the ledge.
How would it feel to fall?
I step closer to the edge.
I’m about to risk it all.

I hear you call my name,
From the bottom of the landing.
Urging me to take the leap,
Gently and undemanding.

I wonder what waits for me,
If I ever land.
I can taste your kiss from here.
Feel your touch with gentle hand…

You call me once again,
Your voice calmer than before.
“Just jump, my love, I’ll catch you.
I promise that, and more.”

I step close to the edge,
Let go of the fear and doubt.
I spread my wings, I’m ready to see
What your love is all about.

Falling was scary and easy.
Like something from a song.
I still had some fears and doubts,
But I knew it wasn’t wrong.

I can finally see the bottom,
I’ve been falling for years.
I can see you standing there,
Eyes filled with tears.

“You caught me like you said you would.
I knew you would be there.”
I wrap you in my arms, so tight,
No feeling can compare.

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Comments

Like a conversation between two lovers. While reading, it makes me laugh at a point and wonder how someone could stand on a cliff telling his lover to wait and see him jump off from a high surface. LoL! Or this involves more things than you thought at the beginning. A very lovely poem to be re-read.
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Thank for the laugh! I didn't think about it from that perspective. I meant it as falling in love, not so much jumping off a cliff but it's funny to think about lol

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