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FALL--upated

Submitted by Geremia on Sun, 2012-03-11 16:58

FALL

And all the heavens
stood watching
in awe
and in the silence
terror brings
they saw
you fall
whirling ever down
to this unholy ground

And deeper
into your hell
echoes of Judas cries
you heard
as you fell

ITALIAN

CADUTA

E poi tutto il cielo
nel silenzio che porta
il terrore
guardava
Lei
che stava
verso la terra profana
cadendo.

Ed a misura al buio
si avvicinava
echi d Giuda
ascotava

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

loved

Sun, 2012-03-11 19:35

At times I feel

At times I feel
you are the most normal self
of human beings
those who
excel

loved

Geremia

Sun, 2012-03-11 19:48

No, my friend it s you who

No, my friend it s you who truly excels and you have many years to do more..

Joe

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loved

Sun, 2012-03-11 20:33

I only hope that cryptic guy ...we all know

escapes... your salutation
this is to my mind
now uppermost,
as you are the Earth's crust
we all know
So for you friend

I toast...

The years yet to traverse
are matters of conjecture
you may not know
why I say so...

loved

Geremia

Sun, 2012-03-11 21:23

As time steals my days
and I decay
Still I have my mind
and pray
the beast will never find
and if it does
i hope not to know
whereof
I came
whereto I go
and yearn to leave
this place
in the bliss
of ignorance
my enemies
my friends again
failures meaningless
where opinion rules
all betrayers fools
for havving never seen
the men behind the screen
of words
that is me.