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FALL

Slowly I walk beneath tall oaks
their crowns at least one hundred feet high.
Their size and age almost chokes
all sunshine from the clear blue skies.

With each breeze the acorns fall
thus confirming time of year
when trees drop their mast and all
and antlers harden on buck deer.

The summer heat? mere memory
with hard frosts approaching fast
via, perhaps, this wind now cooling me
shaking the acorns loose at last.

A few of them bounce off my hat
small ones from a water oak,
the impact just a little pat.
I smile like it's a private joke.

A couple of strides, harder impacts
for I'm now beneath a hickory
which confirms a well known fact
the larger nuts almost hurt me.

Quickly I exit this tree's spread
thinking to find a safer place
then something Big hit my old head
bringing a winch to my lined face.

Around me pool ball walnuts thump.
I've gone from pan into the fire
and nearly got knocked on my rump.
My mood changed from delight to ire.

So rapidly I exit the forest
toward my truck parked in a old road's ruts.
Deciding this ain't the time to take a quest.
I'm glad around here there are no coconuts.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Good thing water melons don't grow on trees lol
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Comments

Fall and nuts
Make quite the combination
Your journey quite the hit
To your great consternation

Thank you for the enjoyable romp through the woods.

Fall and nuts
Make quite the combination
Your journey quite the hit
To your great consternation

Thank you for the enjoyable romp through the woods.

"Quite the hit" huh. Appreciate the visit......stan

author comment

Favorite lines; " A few of them bounce off my hat
small ones from a water oak,
the impact just a little pat
I smile like it is a private joke."
I could almost hear the nuts falling and smell the damp breeze. ~ Gee.
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This poem was inspired by my walking along hearing a few black walnut nut hitting the ground nearby.Fortunately i heard them Before walking under the trees. Thank god there were no coconut trees dropping Their nuts lol....stan

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Just be yourself and always keep an open mind let your heart be light as a feather. Keep hope in your heart this will light the spark to what you need to know. Also a good way of expressing yourself is to practice writing your expressions out on paper first then you can act upon your emotions then cause it will be polished through practice. Love is the essence of my inner existence learn to shun in the resistance. Think of a rainbow.

Mario Vitale

I find it hard to be anybody Except myself ( wouldn't mind being Bill gates for a few years lol). thanks for taking time to read and comment.......stan

author comment

is the word that comes to mind! Made me picture the forest, follow the rhythm and chuckle inside. This is a unique piece for its ability to mingle all those elements together. There is a peculiar sense of reverence for nature, yet at the same time fear of its powers - maybe it is only my interpretation.

So thank you for a great read.

 

Love,
Steph

... to remember what it felt like to have my being set alight
beneath the moon when I was full and I was dancing with the night
when I could see beyond my sight
when I could see beyond my sight

Always good to see somebody new has come to visit. And I'm pleased this poem conveyed all the things it was meant to..........stan

author comment

to write poem about acorns falling on my head. I think you have done a nice job painting the scene. I suppose I should "lighten up" a bit and try to enjoy this poem as I would one by the late great Shel Silverstein. Part of his genius was the cartoons, but he was also possible to keep the poems short, as they were similar in using one dimensional witty ideas. My take is this poem is too long for its theme, and you could get the same effect in a much shorter form.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

I'll write about almost anything which "strikes" my fancy lol. And I'm well aware that I can be long winded at times and will consider a bit of pruning come edit time......stan

author comment

no matter how many times
you may say lol
Mine RFLOL
is equally musical as yours
as said once
conveys all
Glad no coconuts
fell on your hat
ere!
you know what
in keeping with your bending
bowing knees
keep your walks
a wee bit small
long walk=== long poem

as it comes to me in my dreams
so now I sleep less
instead of 12 hours only 11 1/2 hrs
time saved just a half

poetry by 1/10
same conveyance
brevity on other sites
are now becoming
too bright!

You Know I'm long winded and tend to prattle on and on trying to say something (anything) which could easily be said with fewer words or sentences which always seem to elude me for some reason which i can't fathom or understand........................

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that's why you haven't
yet
read my red wagon

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