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The Fall

Submitted by loved on Sat, 2012-05-05 09:22

The Fall
I just fell from a precipice.... though not too high...
fell on the back of my flat head...
heavens saved me
you want to know why?
coz I have yet to compose poems
without a score
and
many will learn from me.....all the more

Two things in life are for certain

CALAMITY

and

OPPORTUNITY

always come unannounced

Curtain!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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judyanne

Sat, 2012-05-05 11:47

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you are such a funny person loved
i hope calamity didn't hurt your head too much
at least it gave you the opportunity to tell us about it :)
love judy
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

loved

Sat, 2012-05-05 13:30

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No there was a thunder... all asunder
I couldn't salvage myself
but to get on my two feet
was helped

now I'm keeping myself under surveillance
for seventy two hours....... I know nothing will happen ...
as this wasn't the first occasion .

I'm adept to face head injuries
but they also are scared of me.........hahahahaa..
Shall be able to give a detailed report
much ,much later may be ,
just wait and do see...

loved

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scribbler

Sat, 2012-05-05 13:31

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perhaps it's all that falling which flattened your noggin lol.............stan

loved

Sat, 2012-05-05 13:34

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head injuries are a great cure
for many a malady.
just believe me..
see you after seventy two hours .
simply pray for me..
of course you will have to
wait and see....

loved

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Candlewitch

Sat, 2012-05-05 14:06

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very humorous with a touch of truth added. I love secret ingredients!

always, Cat

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loved

Sat, 2012-05-05 21:56

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humorously truthful....
So far so good
but another few hours
of self observation will do.
Hopefully I shall compose my thanks
for the concern to all of you.

loved

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Ian.T

Sun, 2012-05-06 03:57

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I would have fetched you a drink of water
it would have saved you from going with Jill
I knew you shouldn't ought'r.
It is Jacks job don't you see
It was his crown that was to be broken
Now what can I tell the kids their rhyme is bespoken
By a young bard that wanted an affair
With a young Jill with golden hair
Get real man and get off that hill
Ha! Ha! I am laughing still,
Yours Sparrow, that bids you no ill

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Sun, 2012-05-06 05:49

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how I wish twas a story ..of Jack and the HIll

sorry ,
I meant Jill
but twas a minor roadside hill
where i fell to my head till
and
failed to pay my electricity bill
ere they threaten me with
a bit of lightening
which they after all did
and the bard is alive still
friend my Ian ...to kill

loved

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temidayo

Sun, 2012-05-20 15:36

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liked the bit on the inevitable being both calamity and opportunity,well I knew death,tax are popular inevitables now I add calamity and opportunity to the list. well do heal well. loved

loved

Sun, 2012-05-20 23:06

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healed and survived
more than 72 hours
So read on newer stuff hence.

loved

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loved

Thu, 2012-08-30 14:43

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we all have to pay
a PRICE
for any PRIZE

loved

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