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Facing The Doubts

Voices of doubts ridicule me
but I refuse to dance to their tune
for their words are a cacophony
that I have finally grown immune.

Where I fall, I will rise again,
Never ending this life with regret.
I know I have much to gain
if I strive hard and never fret.

To fail is to learn limitations
and to grow through experience.
Talking and planning, an incomplete mission
It's in doing one makes a difference..

Change can be a scary venture
to the dark unknown
but staying the same
is a poor option
if happiness is what
one wishes to own.
Humans' developments
are never meant to
be stagnant.

So face the doubts within
and conquer your hidden fears
only then can you win
the dream you've held for years...

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Alidz
''Facing Doubts'''
wouldn't it be better

Well fought with Geezer
but when one is wrong
accept it gracefully
but when is right
fight

thank u for saying
u care for my poetry
you are the greater one
undoubtedly
congrats from me
openly

I really like this write
but I find the meter a tad irregular and therefore off-putting
For example
for their words are cacophony - I would add an 'a' before 'cacophony'

And
that I have finally grown immune. - better grammar would be 'to which I have grown immune'

And, again for meter...
To fail is to learn about limitations - I'd drop the 'about'
for it's in doing one makes a difference.. - and I'd drop the 'for' here

Then the following is way off meter to that of the beginning
This is not necessarily a bad thing if you want to alter the tone of the write, but imo it still needs to follow it's own meter

Change can be a scary venture
to the unknown - ? into the dark unknown
but staying the same
is a poor option
if true happiness is what - I'd drop the 'true' (for meter sake)
one wished to own. - one wishes?
Humans' developments
are never meant to
be stagnant. - needs more words to maintain rhythm (imo)

I'd also suggest you keep the verse length of the beginning
eg
Change can be a scary venture
into the dark unknown
but stayng the same's a poor option
if happiness is what one wishes to own
human developments are never meant
to be stagnant ( or stand alone ? )

So face the doubts within
and conquer your ( secret ?) fears
only then you can win - (can you win ?)
the dream (you ace - ? you've held close) for years...

All i stress is just imo only
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Glad you can drop in. I'm not even thinking about meter at all when I'm doing this write as I that's what free verse is about. lol. I don't know why but I'm still struggling when it comes to meter.

A question

for their words are cacophony - I would add an 'a' before 'cacophony'

I thought after "words" (plural), "a' is not an option. What do you think?

Alid

author comment

I didn't notice the claim to free verse
it was a bit off-putting as the first three stanzas are metered and rhymed
not sure if it's a good idea to mix the rwo - the beginning causes the ending to sound off
(Just my opinion of course)

As for the 'a' - it refers to 'cacaphony' not 'words'
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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