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Face Your Destiny

Do you believe you can attain your dreams
without the sweat of true dedication?
You hope to receive when you've done nothing,
but there're no rewards for missing actions
A stagnant life, collecting fantasies
worth nothing in the face of reality

Reach for the fire within and commit
your heart and soul to embrace a purpose!
May perseverance be the steel of will.
and you'll be, a gift to all, not a curse
Face your destiny wiith pride and courage
as a true warrior in the coming of age

Rise when you fall and continue the fight
failures will make your victory sweeter
as long as you refuse to surrender
a day will come when you'll be the winner!

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I am still very sick I'll keep it short you have come a long way since you started here but I still feel there's so much more you've not shown us yet, I liked the poem very much so ill come back tonight its 7am I've been up all night lol opps ... I'll make one or two suggestions

Take care love and hugs Jayne xox

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

I'm sorry to hear that you're still sick. Will be waiting for your suggestions. You take care, my friend.

Alid

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his poems are a reminder, that you write something very inspirational, just like him

for the visit and the comment.

Alid

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I liked this Alid

raj (sublime_ocean)

Glad you like this.

Alid

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