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In an eyeblink
....it is the incomprehensible
Like the azure,
having neither beginning nor ending.
The prince of innocence
that rides the flying horse
in a transitional space.
The sensitive snail
that sings war & peace
from generation to generation
Pride of the kids
Regret of the negligent
Age.
The strength of the weak
& the weakness of the strong.
The unseen umpire of activities
In an eyeblink, it's
come & gone.
it's the time.
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Eumolpus
Fri, 2017-08-25 21:20
expanding your vision
into the incomprehensible, into the realm of imagination and the use if images and words. Nice poem!
The prince of innocence
that rides the flying horse
in a transitional space.
Very strong use of words and images, has a meaning we can understand only in the imagination.
Not sure about the "snail", the only image that stands out a bit as forced.
These type of "metaphysical" poems are hard to pull off, but I think you are on your way here to understand the process of letting an idea of something play in your head and have it come out as a poem. Keep going!
Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
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YungPrinzeT
Sun, 2017-08-27 22:26
thank you Emolpus for your
thank you Emolpus for your teachings. it has helped me improve
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