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An eye for a heart

I sat ever so silently,
Not a whisper escaping my soul.
What's true-
Might not always be reality,
Nothing is ever built whole.
I watched the birds fly,
All across the deep azure-
Of the sky,
Circling in depth of my eyes-
And then I realized,
I was staring at an ocean.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I don't usually write short poems but I think I did justice with this.
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small
but like an ocean man
you are born to sail
let your eyes be the oars

duplicated post
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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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Duplicated ?

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[ never fall in love with your imagination,
A face that isn't real.
A seed of your desires and dreams,
A seed that'll never be a tree. ]

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and a warm welcome to the Neo
I like this very much. I couldn't think of many things to suggest but a change in verb tense here as you have used past through out the piece.
Not a whisper [escaped] my soul
Hope you don't mind it.
Looking to read more of yours.

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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A lovely write and really good to have you with us.
Hope that you can continue to be with us here your write has brought a fresh pen to this fold, I look forward to reading more of your works, Yours As always, Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Sure, it is evocative, somehow a cross between a Japanese watercolour and the simple serenity of just being, yet it has that certain je ne sais quoi that lends it a picturesque, slightly surreal charm.
Sorry, I have nothing constructive to offer.

cheers,
Jess
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