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The Extra's Reading

Explaining to her that
I was only a double
and could appear anywhere,
she suggested I sleep
a few nights in her temple;
airless, disused, peopled
with gravitationalists handfasting.
She wore a smock
tattooed with hookahs
and a God's illegible
face. Placing a stained
glass card in my palm,
I wept St. Bernard out,
I wept thorns out and sewed
each into a heart. With hideous
cries of pity, she put me
in the city river,
peeling coins over my eyes.

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Highly enjoy your work. It reminded me of Ginsburg's Howl, and my favourite line was was the smock tattooed with Hookahs. The only part that (and it could very well be due entirely to a misreading) stood out a little was the "hideous cries," which, for me, was right on the line of being too forceful in description. However, I could be wrong, and the poem as a whole was truly enjoyable to read.

Nicholas.

kindly

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