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The Extra

I’ve traced the ellipse his walking often forms
the stepsounds that follow him to the river

There are short films which feature
noise clusters in stadiums
built with sugar angels

In his strip booths
male torsos hanging from reel to reel tape,
a millisecond’s gloss for some shady producer.

It is useless to pursue him.

He spends most of his time
plundering the deserts,
lying in the bus stations.

He has celluloid tumbleweeds which play back
the alphabet which has shaped me

A skirt’s semiosis where alphabets contort
your head in willed meat hunks.

These years of windows opening on TV
These years of colgate clown faces
getting so close

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when a poet achieves an extraordinary effect with an unlikely subject and I'm completely baffled by how.

Sorry, I just don't know how to crit this.

If the reading is ok with you I'd like to post it to Facebook though, is that ok? If you want a different pic I can do that too, just post it on your Facebook page and I'll replace it on the SoundCloud one.
https://soundcloud.com/neopoet/the-extra-by-john-allen

cheers,
Jess
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Facebook for reasons I'm sure you've read about, but can I put it on my blog page?

Pax

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anywhere you like, just copy and paste the URL

cheers,
Jess
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