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explorers all of you

you should have been
explorers all of you
and
shown the whole wide world
to blind folks
like us

sitting at the desk
tapping keys only
whereas we should go about
the corners of eternity ….

seeking our final destination
in peace ….
but all human beings are quietlylazy ….
mostly like me.

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Free verse
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Not sure now how you read the poetry.
Our works should be descriptive enough to put the picture in the mind of all people that read or are read the words.
I wonder how we can write to show a person that has never seen a picture where pictures mean nothing.
Then we have to go into feelings, between cold and hot, air pressure and other senses we have, then inner triggered feelings, it would be a severe challenge to any poet, this could be thrown open to all Neopoet people.
Yours as always Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

peek into the mind of a poet self styled
and
see where seeks his eye
at that moment
when he wrote
such a quote

loved

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I think that first stanza is very good then the rest of the poem seem to disconnect you say in your final lines that your lazy, look around you there is poetry everywhere ;)

love JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

in your immitable style
the ......lazy part
is just a pesonification of mine
and
a reflection of the ones
who are don't read kind
hope I did correctly remind

loved

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