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determination in a circulatory
a temperature use that function
but in some forms an other or
dust or reaction as an edit - we edit else
children
we edit like bare bones old rug
contact
do not contact or contact other-wise or
call upon or eat in rest in shade with a wise oak/gum/maple/birch/cider/pine/elk/bow/fibre
oak as fibre or birch in gum so as to eke out
this violent airtime touch of dust in moment
documented
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Comments
weirdelf
Wed, 2017-11-01 15:31
I really like this, Oooopsts
and I don't know why.
Very original style and expression. It shifts under the cerebellum's gaze and, honestly, I am not sure it is not a prank. They said that of William Burroughs.
It stands on its own as a glimpse of cyberpunk/alienation/disintegration imagery and yet, if you would be so kind I would like to hear where you are coming from/going and [shudders] why?
You've got me intrigued, I look forward to your next work.
cheers,
Jess
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