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Everything is not sex

Submitted by loved on Tue, 2013-12-10 12:38

Everything is not sex

everything is not sex nor lust
in my life love comes first
on the sands we roll
I run about
you lie around

my clothes I remove
you let yours fly
then suddenly you come by
sit around my back
touching me every now and then

after all that nothing happens
a kiss is what I want
and in my arms you fall
love me that’s all
let sand flow out of your palms
and kiss me love
anywhere ,twill be like a smoothing balm

we make love
on the sands….

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Ian.T

Mon, 2013-12-16 04:05

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Not one of your better pieces.
There are two places that are not good to make love,
One is a sandy beach, and the other is in the woods under a beech. lol
The first will wear you out, and the second the flies will find you out. lol
Come on make a rug rat in front of a log fire,
But use a fireguard,
The spark in your life is much better,
Than the spark from an old flame.
Have a great yuletide but remember the Sparks from the Yule log,
Yours Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Mon, 2013-12-16 09:33

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As I watch a YouTube

I see the creators back drop
imagery
making love behind the scenes
and as words flash across my mind
a newer music of love I find

Hence such sand in your eyes
do re-read
love it perhaps will breed
in the forest with rustling leaves

ere some joker tells me
wash it all off please

loved

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