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every drop
every drop in the ocean
i'm walking on truth,
on the coals of regret,
the odd broken tooth.
it helps fill the gaps
on one poet's corner
where i showered you flowers
and toed with the fauna
as they licked my arse
'cause that's how it goes.
we may weigh our winters
by a drip on the nose.
Review Request (Intensity):
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Last few words:
nothing really matters
but for the now
like a broken trough
for a thirsty cow.
adieu.
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Comments
Geezer
Fri, 2017-11-24 15:40
Sounds like...
I would have said; "By a drip from the nose". But nice little poem!
~ Geezer.
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Gunnar Hedlund
Sun, 2017-11-26 05:40
thank you most kindly, Geezer.
it makes one's ablutions more the merrier!
g
lovedly
Sat, 2017-11-25 01:33
Wonderful metaphor read it for the first time... BLACKNESS of*
'''coals of regret,''
*regret
did you not that imply
do apprise me kindly
Gunnar Hedlund
Wed, 2017-12-20 16:41
i diddly so
thank you muchly for your words. appreciated.
g
p.s. - apologies for the delay.