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Eve’s dilemma “Minute Poem”

Hello Adam, it’s me your Eve
Please do believe
Never forget
So glad we met

My love so strong can never die
In truth not lie
I give my heart
Never we part

Forbidden was the apple ate
I didn’t know that it was bait
Such travesty
And tragedy

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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i'm really not an expert but this was inspired by another poet. 8/4/4/4
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Not Explicit Content

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I, too think it was a nasty set-up! and He turned his back on it! I like the brevity of the short lines. I'm amazed that Eve wasn't pissed off in being used that way!

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If Eve was pissed off and didn't eat the forbidden apple would we have existed? lol...said in fun...

raj (sublime_ocean)

It's a fascinating topic isn't it, I have a few about Adam and Eve I just love it! This is a minute poem so very restricted but I like to try new stuff

Thank you...Teddy

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lol always taken in good spirits my friend, it's a truly fascinating theory anyway. Who knows!

Thank you...Teddy

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fact or fiction is debatable but a good topic for you to spin your poems around..:) will look forward to new ones..may be I will also write one...

raj (sublime_ocean)

I also have Forbidden fruit if you ever wish to read it it's a bit different. I too love the Adam and Eve topic. I would write my own play one day! I would love to read a poem about them from you Sir.

Thank you...Teddy

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in response to your urging I tried one already about Adam and Eve "Mute question"...:)

have a read..

raj (sublime_ocean)

ratted her out! "It wasn't me!" Personally, I think that rather than run and try to hide, they should have blamed it all on the snake and let him take the "Fall". Oh wait, they tried that didn't they? Hey, there may be a poem in that. ~ Gee.
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See we think the same! hey there are so many imaginaries more to this story. I think people are frightened to challenge it but not I. I look forward to reading yours. Thank you my friend always good to hear what you think.

Thank you...Teddy

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MADAM I'M ADAM

Thank you...Teddy

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