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Eternal Roses

Submitted by lovedly on Sun, 2017-03-05 12:04

These roses
open up like the flower
we always love to see
we admire ere we fire
and
the fragrance
gives away our desires
what we always admire
what are those
hopefully by now
all know

Be happy
these are always lovely
in books years hence
they remind us
of that incident when
t'were the only witness
when one was being
deflowered

By now all
ought to know

The petals wide open
bring smiles as we glow
okay for some blow...
by now we all
ought to know

unlike Lotus
this one
makes us
like sunshine glow

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Keith Logan

Tue, 2017-03-07 08:25

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you have a knack of taking something that seems so simple and delving deeper into it. Also your own particular style of free verse mixed with a touch of rhyme.

Keith Logan
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lovedly

Tue, 2017-03-07 11:43

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My master after reading this said
I was a CRAP poet .
You bless my confidence
I admire positive folks like you
I have read some of your works too
Beautiful
I am hardly a poet.
Hoping to be one
some day
one day
if not today

Let my Master say
what he may
by now I know
he condemns more
than one count
on ones fingers

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lovedly

Wed, 2017-03-08 00:59

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you
for this day
to enjoy my rosy poem
may I say
thank those guys any way
for your deflowering some thing
in your imitable way

thanks for your maiden visit
you make today
I shall also read you
some day
one day
if not ttoday
Sir NEO-POE

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