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ESTRANGED

Submitted by Bonitaj on Fri, 2010-12-10 02:40

I cannot believe
I knew you beyond your name.
A knowledge so intense,
it denied clarity or shame

and yet, there you are now so intimately known,
yet so visibly estranged
Cold, distant, remotely deranged
or is it just me -
alienated, disaffirmed and discarded
by this change

Now it befalls me to realise -
all that I thought I knew was nothing,
compared to what was held from view.
You chose her
and what remains of this Love
I have to eschew...

BB 9 December '10

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Was afraid the content was too convoluted - but the idea of knowing someone beyond their name - just stuck with me. A person is generally "known" by their name - but only superficially. To know someone beyond their name... well it's self evident isn't it?
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft

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Bonitaj

Sun, 2010-12-26 04:04

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I think I used the analogy of "the name" thing to represent how it was only a cover over the inner form - and in this instance I felt I knew this person a lot more intimately... or at least I thought I did! ;)
best wishes for the upcoming year!
Bonita

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scribbler

Sun, 2010-12-26 22:37

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a name is hardly a person just their identification tag. The true person is learned only over time and familiarity..................scribbler

Victorclaude

Mon, 2010-12-27 09:49

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"You chose her
and what remains of this Love
I have to eschew..."

Either there are too many people to choose from, or the heart is as fickle as can possibly be. True love is hard to find, but not difficult to keep. Too bad it is often one-sided.

~V

"When a pickpocket meets a holy man all he sees are his pockets."

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