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Equinox

Submitted by raj on Sun, 2018-09-30 15:40

I wasn't sure
what to make of this Equinox
till I remembered
to add a bit of fizz
to endure longer nights ahead

I added ice and soda
to energize my waning drink
tingling my nostrils, warming my heart
with flavors of winter, waiting in the wings
for fall to make its final call

the drama played out
in my cat's eyes
who almost spilled my drink

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Shadowdancer3349

Mon, 2018-10-01 01:10

love the way you took something as simple as a beverage and transitioned into seasons lol nice write

raj

Mon, 2018-10-01 05:50

for reading and your good words...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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Rula

Mon, 2018-10-01 12:29

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those last lines about the cat flow fabulously raj.

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raj

Mon, 2018-10-01 14:06

Good to know the last few lines made you exclaim :) I left it to reader's imagination as to what the cat might have done to spill the drink...any guesses?

thanks for reading....
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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