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Enticing Autumn

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Thu, 2022-11-17 21:04

These first fingers of frost
Encroaching swift and ever regular
Enticing Autumn to relinquish her embrace
Harken the rise of Winter’s heart
To whom they owe their reverence
Illuminated by dawns early rays
A legion of crystalline adherents
Stand perched upon the brink of rapture

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Lavender

Thu, 2022-11-17 22:00

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Hi, Tim,
What a magical description of frost! I can see the sun shining on it, prisms and color-spectrum everywhere. Yes, this would entice Autumn to finally let go.
Thank you!
L

RoseBlack

Fri, 2022-11-18 08:04

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What a beautiful, melodic way of describing the changing of the seasons. Autumn being coaxed by Winter and finally giving in to his requests. A magical, whimsical write for sure. Gives me a Narnia type feel.

~RoseBlack~

Jackweb

Fri, 2022-11-18 14:54

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A well- versed poetry! I really liked the flow and the alliteration. It makes a smooth and swift cadence in the first line. Excellent!
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