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Englyn Penfyr Rhythm and Metre workshop

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Let's look at one of my favourite forms
ENGLYN PENFYR

Let's kick things off with something new for most of you, I'm sure. This is one of the least well-known poetry forms--an old Welsh form called the ENGLYN PENFYR. It is syllabic and rhymed in nature, as opposed to metered, but the use of internal crossover rhymes lends it a very rhythmic quality.

The poem is comprised of three line stanzas, and each line has a rhyming word in the seventh position. A three syllable caesura is added to line #1, which cross-rhymes with the first three syllables of line #2.

This short form appears simple, but can be quite challenging to craft cleanly, making it all the more pleasing when it finally fits together.

Castle magic - Englyn Penfyr

I Castle magic - Englyn Penfyr
I con/jure/ it /with/ mag/ic,- Cas/tle/ fair
Just/ stare /It /floats /pel/ag/ic,
My/ crea/tion/ huge /but/ tra/gic.

Fly/ing /in/ the/ air/ so/ near, - see /carr/ion
A/ clar/ion/ call/ for /all/ fear,
Dark/ness /not/ my /plan /be/ clear.

I/ have/ mis/cal/cul/at/ed, - mag/ic /dark
Foul/ness /spark/, my /spell/ fat/ed,
Mo/ral/i/ty vac/at/ed.

I/ call /on/ my/ last /re/serve, - cast /a /spell
Liv/ing/ hell/ our /lifes /con/serve,
If /dark/ness/ push/es/ lights /curve.

I/ shaped/ this/ foul /con/struc/tion, - Cast/le dread
So /mis/led,/ by /cor/rupt/ion,
I /must /des/troy ass/ump/tion
Samantha Beardon.

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Comments

Hi Sam.
I didn't get time to join the workshop this month but find what you are dong interesting. I think this discipline is fairly difficult to compose and still make sense.
I first encountered the style in Cornish poetry and the cross rhyming occurred at 4 of line two.
I'll take a shot at your challenge, if I may, and employ the 4th. syllable variation ~ may help with your quality workshop but don't know! Kick me about for it if you like, I don't mind.

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Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan
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I love the old Welsh forms but great to see a Cornish one with a similar set up its interesting to see and hear the cadance from a rhymed syllabic form. So look forward to it.

author comment

if i get one stanza i will be lucky. this is not my cup of tea but i will try

other than what you mentioned, is it correct there are no specific syllable counts? i have been trying to get seven syllables in second and third lines, from what i jotted down but i notice in yours some lines have different counts

7 per line Cathy plus the 3 syllable envoi on the first line.

author comment

nevermind my last long comment. i thought i had to get the accent on the seventh syllable. i just reread your instructions.

want to be sure. is this where you want our poem posted

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