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At The End Of It All (for Steven)

At The End Of It All
(for Steven)

once again
I gaze into your eyes
and feel
the soft silken curtain
of night
settle about my face.
the stars in the firmament
cannot out shine
the radiance
in your eyes.
the light that suspends
and upholds me,
keeping me from the pit
of desolation.
my lifeline,
in a harsh world
of uncaring strangers,
whose empty thoughts
are a regurgitation
of a television mentality.
your all encompassing
tenderness,
is my connection
to a better world,
where love is
so much more than
a traders commodity.
to you I pledge
my soul's eternity.

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The first half is filled with touching imagery of love, while the second part is more abstract, but they form two hemispheres of the same strong emotion.
Great poem!

Jack

I'm glad that you enjoyed my poem.

*hugs, Cat

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I like the almost mystical quality of the first few stanzas! Magic! ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

did I surprise you? LOL! I get a lot of inspiration from Steven!

*hugs, Cat

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stunning!

regards

One.

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

yes you are...never forget it!

*love Sis

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

Excellent.........but I still have a suggestion since I have read that close repletion of the same word is not a good thing. Eyes, try changing the first of the lines with eyes into I gaze upon your face and see how you like it.

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